Pagan Poetry

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Comment by Lenore on February 12, 2009 at 3:14pm

i started to rewrite it and i got the beginning down

"Screams echo within chamber walls
I don't know if i can bear it all.
Vibration overbearing
Pain overpowering
Doubled over fists clenched tight
Why won't this end?
Why must i suffer through this?
This agony?
This pain?
This torture?
This humiliation?
This horrid fate?"

That's it so far, it's kinda weird because once i get an idea and i write it down the finished product is sometimes nothing like the first at all!

Example the novel i'm currently working on

i got the idea on vacation we were on the lake and Bob lost his hat we chased it down and all that (that rhymes!)

Anyway i got the idea of a story where a guy loses his hat and something happens and he dies and them the wife finds it. (very basic and simple)

Currently years ago Frank's friend drowns and he blames himself, 12 years later he gets married yadiyada his friend haunts him not wanting to be alone (his friend had ADD and ADHD) Frank has flashbacks and remembers the time on that same lake when his friend loses his dogtag. Anyway after a few twists and turns Frank goes insane and dies, His wife shortly gives birth (one of the reasons resulting in Frank going insane, the boy looks just like his friend) her son finds the dogtag. DUN DUN DUN! :)

Yea you can kinda see the connection but it's definitely evolved!

Comment by Cameron S. on February 12, 2009 at 5:51am

~Nicole~ Thanks happy you liked it. It's funny how some things just come to us at some times more then others.

~Lenore~ One thing to remember in a way poetry is a lot like writing a childrens book. (not sure that will help or not) Also pleae continue to right poetry It's nice to read others work. ^_^

Comment by Lenore on February 11, 2009 at 7:38pm

Merry Meet

I am somewhat young! lol but writing is my passion and i do love nickelback yes. :) there is a system i go through when i write and i'm a lot better at short stories then i am at poetry so right now i'm experimenting. If you guys have any suggesting please speak out! i'm a willing and very fast learner!

Marry Part
Lenore

Comment by Cameron S. on February 10, 2009 at 7:17pm

Nice very true

Comment by Lenore on February 10, 2009 at 5:15pm

I Don't Know What To Call This
By Lenore

Screams echo within chamber walls
I don't know if i can bear it all

No one listens
No one thinks
No one dreams
No one cares

Life is to important to waste
Yet some let it pass on bye
Without even a glimpse at fate
Or their chances at happiness

No one understands
No one stops to smell the roses
No one dare to object
To what they believe is wrong

Life has no meaning to them
Just something that wastes 90 years

If everyone could love
If everyone could care
If everyone could think
If everyone dreamed

War would end
Hunger will be no more
Everyone would accept everyone
Life would have a meaning
People would live everyday to it's fullest

With kindness comes respect
With respect come trust
With trust comes love
With love comes life

<3 wow i just made that up of the top of my head!

Comment by Cameron S. on February 10, 2009 at 4:47pm

A Sickness
by
Cameron S.
Shadow

My head filled with splinters;
each move worse then the first.
I lie here in bed
hoping I'll recover, for I can't
afford a doctor, or nurse.

I cough till I choke,
I don't breath till I gasp;
for if I don't I
feel it's wrath. I curse and,
moan like a wounded calf.

Don't knock on my door,
I'm trying now to just sleep.
My kidneys they warn me;
sadly I may soon go, R.I.P.

I have so much to
do, yet fear so little time.
I wonder will I regret
in my next life about things,
and having so very little
time; to do what I need.
With a sigh I seizure,
no longer able to say my goodbyes

Comment by DESTINY DAWN on February 7, 2009 at 5:56pm

PATHS
Current mood: blissful

I SIT AND WONDER HOW I'VE GOTTING TO WHERE I'M AT NOW, IN MY LIFE. DID I MAKE A WRONGE CHOICE SOMEWHERE THAT MADE SOMEONE I LOVE DISAPPEAR. MAYBE I DIDN'T TAKE ON OFFER I SHOULD HAVE, THEN MAYBE EVERY THING U NOW AS YOUR LIFE NOW IS COMPLETELY TURNED AROUND. THE QUESTION IS DO WE PLAN OUR PATH OR IS THERE SOMEONE THAT MAPS IT OUT FOR U. CHOOSEING TO MAKE THIS PERSON PERFECT OR THESE TWO IN LOVE FOREVER, OR THAT THIS PERSON WILL BE RICH. THIS GIRL A STRIPPER THIS ONE A STAY AT HOME MOM. I ALWAYS THOUGHT THAT TRUE BUT NOW THAT THE CLOUDS THAT WHERE LIFTED FROM MY EYES, I REALIZED THAT WE CHOOSE OUR OWN PATH, ALL WE HAVE TO DO IS GET YOUR ASSES UP AND ACTUALY DO SOMETHING WITH YOU LIFE. DO WHAT U NEVER GOT TO DO THAT U WANTED TO SO BADLY. IF U PLAY MUSIC AND GREAT AT IT THEN BE FREE AND PLAY YOUR HEART OUT. IF U WANT TO BE AN ARTIST GET OF YOUR ASS AND PAINT THE WORLD DIFFERENT. WHAT I'M TRYING TO SAY IS BE WHO U TRUELY WANT TO BE, BE WITH THE PERSON U LOVE, BUY YOUR OWN ISLAND IF YOUR RICH. BE U NOT WHAT U HIDE AND HOLD BACK. FLY . I WISH TO FLY INTO A DREAM WORLD WHO'S WITH ME.CHOOSE YOUR PATH DON'T LET SOMEONE REDIRECT U. I'M STARTING TO DO THAT NOW AND ITS HARD BUT IT ALL COMES OUT IF U FOLLOW ONLY YOUR PATH..... I KNOW IM FUCKING CRAZY....LOL

Comment by Cameron S. on February 5, 2009 at 2:25pm

actually I was the one that chose to do so when i say clipped my wings I was refering to the fact that when I (myself) am with someone I don't look at other girls I give them my full undivided attention. I feel it would be rude to look at other women when in a relationship and respectful enough not to while in a relationship. (lol and they say chivalry is dead. (lol shows what they know)

Comment by Cameron S. on February 5, 2009 at 12:37pm

Feelings inside
by
Cameron S.
Shadow

my affection was one of love.
To me you were my angel sent from above;
we were like to loving doves.

Willingly I clipped my wings; with
you my love I planed to stay. Though ounce
Id been bound, you then flew away.

As I look from the ground
towards the sky I wish together we could fly;
with you I soared the sky's.

I spot a cat; we decide
to play. He pounces and finally I cry
out in dismay. for I
see you flirting with another guy, and let the
cat then tear me apart as
I slowly give up on everything; let myself die.

only one tear do I let slip
across my face; from my eye I whisper with
my last breath a simple goodbye

Yet an angel saves me from
the cat. I am spared of death, but forced to
carry this emptiness eating away at
my insides. Innocence I once had now long gone;
I care not to boast, for
I no longer have faith just
my pride. I am hollow as is our song
empty feelings...I try my best
to hide growing numb cradling myself,crying deep inside.
Pressing forward though partially I've died.

Comment by Cameron S. on February 5, 2009 at 12:36pm

I liked the flow of the poem nice work ^_^ *hugs* It's very true indeed. Though I plan on posting another poem as well mine seems odd to come after yours I think lol.

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