Now before you read this poem you must understand the message implied, it is not a suicide letter it is meant to enlighten you about why you shouldn't. so on that note
Darkness embeds my deepest desire
Ashes are all that remain of this once lit fire
Now I leave you cruel, cruel world
I have worked hard in such a whirl
Please forgive me if I make anyone sad
But always remember when all were glad
I feel the vale of death embark
I hear the angels hark
I feel my soul start to release
I have truly found my eternal peace
Suddenly I find myself shrouded in black
The gift that was given is taken back
Now I'm stuck in this firey place
Never to enjoy the Gods eternal grace
interesting concept of embracing darkness, and held fast only to realize the conceptual Hell to come. Though I personally thik you should bring out more reasons to emphasize why not .to kill ones self