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Those Three words for you
Ripped, Crushed, Bleeding on the floor
My voice is denied
Those feeling for you
Locked up, Chained up, Left behind
My heart has been caged
You where broken, love
I tryed to save your sad heart
but I was brought down
but we remain close
In touch, In reach, together
It will bealright
Ripped, Crushed, Bleeding on the floor
My voice is denied
Those feeling for you
Locked up, Chained up, Left behind
My heart has been caged
You where broken, love
I tryed to save your sad heart
but I was brought down
but we remain close
In touch, In reach, together
It will be
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Permalink Reply by Cameron S. on
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Beautiful and veary deep. Good work. Sometimes the hardest thing is to do what must be done
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Permalink Reply by Gawaine Caldwater Ross on
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Interesting. I thought of a device for the verse scheme. Since the first line is "Those (it should be 'these') three words for you,"
why not try making every line 3 words? Thus the first verse might read "Ripped, Crushed, Bleeding/ On the floor/ My voice gone/" It would make it a much tighter poem and would lose nothing.
I hope this isn't the result of a recent heartache.
Bright blessings,
Gawaine -
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Permalink Reply by Plague Master on
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Its supposed to be a long haiku poem.
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